Trait: confidence
Crime
Ghost is so
confident that he thinks he could do everything successfully and would be the
best man in the world. Of course, he was the best one in his class. But one day,
his roommate had a test with him together and got a higher scores than which
Ghost got. According to this situation, his roommate was so happy and told the
thing to every person he met. As a result, everyone around them said something
which gave a strong impact to Ghost. Ghost was so angry about the way in which
people saw him and talked about him. In consequence, Ghost thought all the bad
thing happened on himself were caused by his roommate. To end the worst
situation, he wanted to kill his roommate. So he went home to make an ice blade
and invited his roommate to public baths. So the day they went to the public
baths, Ghost brought the ice blade. In the changing room, Ghost used the ice
blade killed his roommate immediately as his roommate changing his clothes. In
consequence, when police came in they couldn’t find where the weapon is, they
gave up to search the criminal.
(1) He wrote the article in the 3rd person, and reporter this event well
回复删除(2) Trait: confident. Maybe he can use prideful to show that his overconfidence.
(3) a murder. There are not so much word to make Ghost to be guiltless.
(4) Yes. but not so much. Just show the reason of the murder
(5) this article overstate his confidence and in real life we will not kill people because of a such little things
(6) Ghost is just a confident student and he overrate himself too much. His classmate didn't think Ghost's feel and lead to this murder
1: Ghost shows that Ghost is so smart and only want to be the No.1 , so he killed another one.
回复删除2: Ghost says that is confident, but I do not think so. If he is confident, he will not care about others. Maybe aggressive is better.
3. He used a knife made by ice to kill others. I think maybe ice blade is not easy to keep in school. The police still will find the strange water. And changing room is not a good place. I think he should change to another place.
4. Yes, he justified it.
5. Realistic Ghost is not so aggressive, both not so evil and so smart.
6. Too like Amy Bishop. (Also is not as smart as writer wrote.)
Ghost,
回复删除I don't see the causality between the negative trait and the crime.
It seems like there is a lot of importance placed on the way that Ghost kills his victim (it is very clever, but this takes over the story).
What is an "ice blade?" A blade made of ice (we call this an icicle). Or a blade made to break ice? These are very different things.
This might work better if Ghost's trait was being creative and he was challenged to think of the best murder weapon. (Maybe the ice pick is his idea, maybe it is it the victims' idea).